People walk by me
and gasp and gape
They are in AWE
with my beauty,
my vivacious curves.
They think I am so nice
and spoiled.
They love to test my interior;
Caress my dash
And steer my wheel.
I am only but a motorcar
With a waxed body.
People only judge me
By my looks.
They never take time
To hear my engine purr,
Or know my true thoughts.
I am the Lamborghini
Destined to eternal solitude
If only the people could look
Beyond their shallow desires
And see my true mileage .
16 comments:
i am a beast
Sam -
Just read your poem - thought it was great - very little air words, nicely polished, and I really like a few of the words you used: "see my true mileage", "destined to eternal solitude"...
Is there space between the "shallow desires" line and the final line for a bit of explanation?
For example:
Beyond their shallow desires
-belongings, image, envy -
See my true mileage.
-Mr Coles
hey sam oth of your poems are great i really like them u really tried your best to make out all of the words and not make them air words as i can c u dont have any
scott
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scott
good job Sam i felt you used a lot of detail i liked it a lot
Your poems are great not many air words. I especially liked the one about the paintings in your house
-Luke Stein
wow sam very descriptive and deep i see what you are trying to say here you have shown me another side of the lamborghini as soon as i read it i couldnt believe it was your writing amazing job dont change the poem one bit
-lewis
Sam
that was a great poem to read i like how you talked about what most people think of a Lamborghini
mipster. when you say they think i am so nice and spoiled you should say they think i am a sexy beast or beautiful and spoiled. the next sentece you can say i love to show off and test my interior. when you say i am only a motor car you should say like i am only a fast race car that is nice and shinny. you could say to hear my load purring engine can atract attention. so you mite want to go and look into this poem and look for other stuff because this topic is good because there can be a lot to write about it because you can put some detail into it because a lamborghini has a lot of things to write about. even if you are jusy talking abiut the rims you can say what you see behand those rims. a nice shiny break pad awaits to be used. great poem and just look for some changes.
Really like the Lamboorghini poem - very literal.
Mrs. N
you guys are all douche bags and your wasting your time and this is not poetry because it doesn't rhyme.real poetry rhymes.
poetry doesent have to ryme
I want a lambroghini.....please????!!!!!
I want a lambroghini.....please????!!!!!
I want a lambroghini.....please????!!!!!
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